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[Kiriban] T H E Y W E R E W R O N G

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i don't even know anymore 
what am I lacking
what's good about it?
I have asked a few artists for a critique so that I may know what my manips are lacking and what they show good in them.

please, I don't mind harsh critiques and take them kindly :heart:

i've been at manipulation for about 6 months now 
thank you to all who help :heart:
for Timeless-Flight 



Because there’s something inside you
That made you keep trying
Despite everyone who told you to quit
You built a cast around your broken heart
And signed it yourself
You signed it
“They were wrong”

get a better mirror, look a little closer, stare a little LONGER 
they
were
wrong.

inspiration from "To This Day" by: Shane Koyczan
you may NOT use this artwork in any way shape or form. 
copyright Ocean-Amber 
Image size
2048x1536px 1.52 MB
Make
Canon
Model
Canon PowerShot S5 IS
Shutter Speed
1/636 second
Aperture
F/4.0
Focal Length
6 mm
ISO Speed
80
Date Taken
Sep 8, 2011, 3:14:26 PM
Sensor Size
5mm
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:star::star::star-half::star-empty::star-empty: Overall
:star::star::star-half::star-empty::star-empty: Vision
:star::star::star::star-empty::star-empty: Originality
:star::star::star-half::star-empty::star-empty: Technique
:star::star::star-empty::star-empty::star-empty: Impact

Amber, this is a great choice of stock, and your idea is fab!

The minimal amount of blurred background really brings our attention on the horse as our main focus. I think your cutting ability is good here, and your text is lovely <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="15" height="15" alt=":)" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="391" title=":) (Smile)"/>

A few things I would like to bring to your attention are the hair, shadow;

I think you have full potential on creating a beautifully wavy mane and tail for this baby! Mainly the crest of the mane and the forelock, as they look a little bit too straight <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="15" height="15" alt=":)" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="391" title=":) (Smile)"/> And there are some great tutorials on here to really help you along with painting hair.
The shadow looks does seem to be in the wrong position, especially since my sense of lighting when I view this, is coming in from the right top side of the picture, I want to suggest to you, to look at shadowing in other artists' manipulations here on DA, BUT also, I want to give you a tip that I myself only just started applying to my work.. Instead of using pure black for shadows (unless in a very dark area such as a black cave or black water), use a dark colour located on your picture in the area you wish to shadow - such as in this picture a dark green and brown in those light brown areas.

Apart from said, I think you have done a really brill job ^_^
Keep it up!!